Talk:DEMMA'S DEMISE!/@comment-27032103-20160602012214/@comment-28618575-20160602071537

MaZano is right, Jesse's interpretation is very good. The writing, on the other hand, not so much. As The Six-Fingered One wrote elsewhere the whole story is well built into a crescendo, and here Jesse has been right choosing dramatic theatrical monologues, the best way of exploiting the current claustrophobic setting. It would all be good if both Jessie and his audience were not more familiar with cheap television tropes than with Shakespeare. It shows: at this point Jesse is stuck with his persona, awkward and weird in a trivial sense and yet hopelessly superficial and uninteresting. Even if he were able to, elevating the discourse now would feel too much out of place.

"What aileth thee?" would even fit within a Shakespearian dialog, but what we are hearing instead sounds trite and derivative.